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Billions of dollars are being wasted on space research. The money used could be better if used to improving condition on people on earth. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#billions #dollars #space #research #money #condition #people #earth
Nowdays
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compitation
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competition
 for
space
 research programs. Some
people
belive
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 that the
money
spending
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for
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space
 research should be
utlize
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utilised
 to improve life on
earth
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. I completely support
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 view which
i
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 will explain in
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 essay.
Huge
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 amount of
money
needed
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 for
space
 programs-
utilize
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 for education and healthcare. several developing countries
does
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 not have basic school and hospital facilities.
for
instance
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 the United States of America's budget for
space
reserch
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research
 is more than
annual
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 GDP of several
contries
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countries
 in
African
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 continent. The
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government
goverment
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government
 should concentrate more on the vital needs
for
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people
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the people
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 which is the primary responsibility
a
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 The high failure rate of
space
 programs will waste the
taxpayers
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taxpayer's
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money
.
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instance
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 the Mars mission
is
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 failed more than sixty times which is a large burden for the governments.
Some times
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 it will be a
compitation
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competition
 between the countries rather than the
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for example
the
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space
researches
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research
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cold
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the cold
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 war time. High failure
comparing
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 to any other experiment make the
citizens
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citizen's
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 life more difficult. The
researches
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research
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 shows that
the common
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people
 are not
intersted
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interested
for
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the
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space
exploring
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 programs. In conclusion, the
money
spending
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for
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on
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space
reserach
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research
 should be reduced and
divert
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 to
well-being
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the well-being
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 of common
people
.
High
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 failure rate of the
space
 program
wasting
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wastes
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 the
money
 of
taxpayer
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taxpayers
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 which should be utilized for well-being of the society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • billions of dollars
  • wasted
  • improving conditions
  • technological advancements
  • inspires
  • motivates
  • contributes
  • understanding of the universe
  • investment
  • indirect benefits
  • priority
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