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It costs a lot of money for a country to host an international sports event, such as the Olympic Games and Football World Cup. Some people think that this is a waste of money, but others believe the opposite. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Opinions are divided on whether it costs a lot of
money
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 for a country to host an international
sports
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event
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, or whether some people find it not wasteful to do
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event
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 I understand why several people support the former view, I am still in favour of the latter. Those who believe that it is not beneficial to spend a lot of
money
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 building stadiums may have various arguments. From their point of view, hosting an international
sports
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event
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 requires a large number of
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 to build stadiums and
sports
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 facilities to serve varied types of games.
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, organizers of modern sporting events have successfully addressed
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 concerns by inventing mobile stadiums, thereby making them become multi-purpose venues. A significant example
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 is the stadium in Qatar, which was constructed using containers for the 2022 World Cup.
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 can lead to the fact
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 solution can make it possible to transport them to any destination without costs a couple of
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.
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, I still side with those who believe that international
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 events play an important role in the
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 of humans. Chief among these is that host countries could make profits thanks to advertisements of various famous brands. The second reason is that it is essential for the mental life of folk. Since there are
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this type
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 of
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 events, the members of the family can strengthen their relationships. In conclusion, despite acknowledging why people think that it is wasteful to do
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event
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, I still hold the belief that there
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 advantageous impacts on not only the government and organizers’ financial benefits but
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 the mental health of civilians.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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