Your city council is planning to pull down one of the historic buildings in your town because they do not have funds to renovate it. As a citizen, you do not want it to happen. Write a letter to the city council. In your letter, •say what the importance of this historic building is • mention why it should be renovated rather than pull down • suggest a plan to raise funds and maintain the building in the future

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I read the article in the newspaper about
demolish
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white
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fort in my town by the city council as they do not have enough money to fix it. I am not happy with the decision made by the high authorities because the building is popular.
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, the building was originally built by ancient people and has amazing historic paintings. It has equipment which
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used in the past by local people.
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, it has one gallery where all the pictures of
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and famous writers are gathered who
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participate
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in the freedom of India in 1947.
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, I feel it should be renovated as it describes the rich culture and history of ancient
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. It gives knowledge to coming generations
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humans
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during
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era. Apart from that, it is famous in different countries and
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visitors from various places.
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, it must be saved by decorating it, so tourists come and learn about our culture.
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, I read that there are financial issues to start the
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of the fort.
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, I have the idea to collect money
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each resident of our town by contributing as much as they can.
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, we organize seminars to motivate the citizens to generate funds for rebuilding the old building. I recommend you
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change your decision
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take down the important building. Yours Sincerely, LS
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Include more specific details about the historic building and its importance to strengthen your argument.
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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