Your city council is planning to pull down one of the historic buildings in your town because they do not have funds to renovate it. As a citizen, you do not want it to happen. Write a letter to the city council. In your letter, •say what the importance of this historic building is • mention why it should be renovated rather than pull down • suggest a plan to raise funds and maintain the building in the future
I read the article in the newspaper about
demolish
Change the verb form
demolishing
white
fort in my town by the city council as they do not have enough money to fix it. I am not happy with the decision made by the high authorities because the building is popular.
Correct article usage
the white
Firstly
, the building was originally built by ancient people and has amazing historic paintings. It has equipment which were
used in the past by local people. Change the verb form
was
Secondly
, it has one gallery where all the pictures of solders
and famous writers are gathered who Correct your spelling
soldiers
took
Verb problem
apply
participate
in the freedom of India in 1947.
Wrong verb form
participated
Moreover
, I feel it should be renovated as it describes the rich culture and history of ancient time
. It gives knowledge to coming generations Fix the agreement mistake
times
how
Change preposition
about how
the
humans Correct article usage
apply
live
during Wrong verb form
lived
prehistoric
era. Apart from that, it is famous in different countries and Add an article
the prehistoric
attraction of
visitors from various places. Wrong verb form
attracts
Therefore
, it must be saved by decorating it, so tourists come and learn about our culture.
Furthermore
, I read that there are financial issues to start the redevelop
of the fort. Replace the word
redevelopment
However
, I have the idea to collect money by
each resident of our town by contributing as much as they can. Change preposition
from
For instance
, we organize seminars to motivate the citizens to generate funds for rebuilding the old building. I recommend you to
change your decision Fix the infinitive
apply
of
take down the important building.
Yours Sincerely,
LSChange preposition
to
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coherence cohesion
Include more specific details about the historic building and its importance to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas into clear paragraphs to improve coherence and cohesion.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary to enhance your writing.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to improve clarity of expression.
The Greeting
Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.
Always start an informal letter in the ways:
- Dear + name
- Hi / Hello + name
‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.
For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:
- Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
- Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.