Some people feel that there should be a fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others feel that the circumstances of an offense should be taken into account when deciding on a punishment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The maps illustrate the future development plans for 2029 and the 1999 Malvern Nature
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campus.
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, there will be a new connection between
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, the
sports
field
will change in size in order to provide space for the
car
park
2. So, the current
car
park
will
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as
car
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1.
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although
path
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will be modified to connect
scholl
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school
buildings, there will be a new road directly
connect
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main
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the main
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enterance
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entrance
,
sports
field
, and
car
park
2. First of all, in 2029,
the
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school
building 1 will connect with
school
building 2 by building a pathway at the
rightside
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right side
lower
concer
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concern
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connected at the middle with the original path which
also
will link
the
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school
building 3 together.
Moreover
, the old
sports
field
will transform
to
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a
rectangle shape
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building at its south position.
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, the original space of
sports
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field
will
transform
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to
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school
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building on the left side and
car
park
2 on the right side, to the north of the new
sports
field
. In the second place,
the
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new road will be built to connect
car
park
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1 and 2 and it will be to the south of
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building 2.
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, trees will
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to the north of
school
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building 3 and to
east
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of the
car
park
2 in 3 decades later.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Equal treatment
  • Deterrence
  • Impartiality
  • Judicial discretion
  • Mitigating factors
  • Rehabilitation
  • Legal precedents
  • Bias
  • Non-violent crime
  • Severity
  • Inconsistencies
  • Sentencing guidelines
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