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Writing Samples
Band 8

Your city council is planning to pull down one of the historic buildings in your town because they do not have funds to renovate it. As a citizen, you do not want it to happen. Write a letter to the city council. In your letter, •say what the importance of this historic building is •mention why it should be renovated rather than pull down • suggest a plan to raise funds and maintain the building in the future

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I read the article in the newspaper about demolishing the white fort in my town by the city council as they do not have enough money to fix it. I am not happy with the decision made by the high authorities because the building is popular.
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, the building was originally built by ancient people and has amazing historic paintings. It has equipment which was used in the past by local people.
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, it has one gallery where all the pictures of soldiers and famous writers are gathered who participated in the freedom of India in 1947.
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, I feel it should be renovated as it describes the rich culture and history of ancient times. It gives knowledge to coming generations about how humans lived during the prehistoric era. Apart from that, it is famous in different countries and attracts visitors from various places.
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, it must be saved by decorating it, so tourists come and learn about our culture.
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, I read that there are financial issues to start the redevelopment of the fort.
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, I have the idea to collect money from each resident of our town by contributing as much as they can.
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, we organize seminars to motivate the citizens to generate funds for rebuilding the old building. I recommend you change your decision to take down the important building. Yours Sincerely, LS

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coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and supporting details.
lexical resource
Use a variety of vocabulary to enrich your writing.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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