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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The maps above depict how the village of Ryemouth
development
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developed
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 from 1995 to
present
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the present
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. There
was
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were
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 a lot of changes, which I will try to explain
on
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in
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 the next paragraphs.
At
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In
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 the past, there
were
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was
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 a fishing port and a fish market that no longer
exist
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existed
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.
Besides
, the forest park was replaced
for
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by
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 two tennis courts.
In addition
, the farmland
at
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in
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 the Northeast was replaced by a golf lawn. The old shops near the sea were transformed
in
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into
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 a restaurant. Where used to be the fish market in 1995, was building some apartments with view to the sea.
However
, the cafe and the hotel remained the same today, except
to
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for
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 the fact that
building
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there is
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 a car park next to the hotel.
At
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In
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 the housing area, was building a new road, and the number of houses increased a lot. The main road from
housing
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the housing
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 area to the cafe
keeps
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kept
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 equal in 1995.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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