The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major citites with date opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparison where relevant.

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The table above illustrates data about

underground

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the underground

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railway system in six major cities. The data includes the

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following

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cities: London, Paris,

Tokyo

, Washington DC, Kyoto and Los Angeles. The main features are

date

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the date

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opened, kilometres of route, and passengers per

year

(in millions).

Overall

, the oldest underground railway is in London, and the newest one is in Los Angeles. Paris is the second oldest subway line. The largest metro system belongs to London and the shortest belongs to Kyoto, with 394 and 11 kilometres, respectively. Analysing the numbers, especially the

amount

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number

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of passengers per

year

, it is possible to deduce that the underground system more

crowed

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crowded

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Tokyo

, with 1927 people per

year

whereas

the most underused is in Kyoto, with 45 passengers each

year

. Washington DC and

Tokyo

have almost the same kilometres of route, despite the fact that

Tokyo

has about 13 times more users per

year

than Washington DC.

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