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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is believed by some
people
 that
professionals
 like doctors or engineers should be bound to
work
 in the place or
country
 where he had completed
his
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study
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studies
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 on training.
On the contrary
, Other
people
 want them to be free agents. At the outset, I agree with the first group but I must confess that the second opinion is much better and logical. On the one hand, the government of a
country
 spend a lot of money to make a doctor or engineer. The amount of money is huge so
that
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apply
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those
people
should
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must live in their
trainer
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country
.
This
 large amount of money
come
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comes
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 from the taxes of poor farmers, butchers, cobblers etc.
Besides
, as they are trained here they will have a great experience
to give
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 services to the local
people
. They should
work
 for renovation with their acquired knowledge.
On the other hand
, most of the time the resources for
further
 learning
maybe
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 limited.
In Addition
, though the government paid for their study, they had to buy study materials which are highly expensive.
Furthermore
, If there is a limited laboratory facilities the
professionals
 will be unable to test or improve their knowledge. If there is a chance to
work
 as a free agent, they can go abroad and acquire more sophisticated knowledge and after coming back they can serve It in more effective ways.
Moreover
, If they have no
intension
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 to come back, they can energize the community of
professionals
 and help their fellow
professionals
 in different ways. Take Muhammad Yunus as an example - Whether he was not allowed to
work
another
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in another
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country
, we Bangladeshi
people
 might not get a noble
laurate
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 and a great scholar. In conclusion, I am inclined to say that
the
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professionals
 like doctors engineers or others should have a chance to
work
 in another land as a free agent. It will be helpful for
professionals
 and obviously for a
country
 in
a
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 long run.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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