The graph below gives information about Dubai gold sales in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below gives information about Dubai gold sales in 2002.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The line diagram shows data about
Dubai
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Dubai's
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gold
sales in 2002.
Overall
it is undeniable that the
gold
trading in March
was
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reached a peak 350 million of dirhams. All the period of the graph fluctuated over
year
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a year
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time. Turning to
main
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the main
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part, the
most bad
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worst
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month
to
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for
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the
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apply
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Dubai was
april
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April
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, given that
gold
sales dramatically dropped.
However
, subsequent months
also
decrease
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the price of
gold
, but a decrease was
a
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gradually and steadily until
juli
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Juli
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. From
juli
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july
to
october
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October
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a
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progress
was sharply fluctuated
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sharply fluctuated
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.
Then
martinally
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finally
climbed to the initial cost of
golds
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gold
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words gold with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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