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The graph and table below gives information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries,

The graph and table below gives information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries,
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The line graph illustrates global
water
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 used by three sectors (agriculture, industrial use, and domestic use) from 1900 - 2000,
while
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 the table shows
water
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 consumption in
Brazil
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 and Congo in 2000.
Overall
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, it can be noted that the amount of global
water
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 use by all sectors increased over the given period.
Furthermore
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, agriculture had the highest
water
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 consumption over the given 100 years. It is
also
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 clear that
water
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 consumption per person in 2000 was higher in
Brazil
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 compared to Congo. Regarding the line graph, agriculture relied on
water
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 the most in the given time, which kept increasing from 500 km3 in the first year to 2000 km3 in the final year.
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, the amount of
water
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 used by Industrial rose slowly from approximately 100 km3 in 1900 to 900 km3 in 2000.
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, there was a slight increase in the usage of
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 domestically from 50 km3 at the beginning of the period to 300 km3
at the end
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. By looking at the table, the population of
Brazil
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 was 176 million, and each person consumed 359 m3 of
water
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,
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 the irrigated land was 26500 Km2.
On the other hand
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, Congo had less population than
Brazil
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, which was 52 million,
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 the irrigated land was 100km2.
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, each person consumed 8 m3 of
water
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, brazil, km with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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