The chart below shows the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram shows the
rate
of electrical appliances
ownership and the duration of time taken to do household chores in a country between the period of 1920 to 2019. For an overview, it can be seen that the electrical Change the noun form
appliance
appliance
usage and adoption
rate
over the
time has shown an upward trend from the Correct article usage
apply
rate
of 0-40% in the early years to an overall
higher than 70% adoption
rate
in 2019. On the other hand
, the opposite trend is reflected on
the average duration needed to do the chores, which is diminished from 50 hours a week in the 1920s to a mere 10 hours.
Change preposition
in
While
all of the electrical appliances
Change noun form
appliances'
appliance's
adoption
rate
shows a rise over time, the Change to a plural noun
rates
rate
of the increments for each appliance
are
different. Change the verb form
is
Although
the refrigerator is
the least-owned Wrong verb form
was
appliance
in the 1920s with almost 0 percent
, Change the spelling
per cent
this
appliance
type experienced the most prominent surge to a whopping 90 percent
in the 1960s. In comparison, the washing machine and vacuum cleaner exhibit a less drastic rise in the Change the spelling
per cent
adoption
rate
from the earlier year to the present with the vacuum cleaner rising steadily from 30% to 100% while
the washing machine experiences slight fluctuations and showing
the least growth from 40% to 75%.Wrong verb form
shows
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