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Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?

#people #lives
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of
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folk Adapt to live their
life's
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 close to where they
born
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.in
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In
this
 essay ,I will highlight the reasons for choosing
this
 and
also
 discuss both
merits
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 and demerits. To start with; the first reason is to
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on
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 a constant condition,
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, spending their holidays and weekends at home doing their hobbies or playing with their children and so on.
Secondly
, some people
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 safe when
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they
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close to their parents or relatives and
found
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 it’s a
a
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kind of
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.
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, the Individuals
are
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belive
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believe
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belonging to
this
 community and they should improve it and work there.
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, The merits of these things are to live
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a
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 safe side ,doing what do you do always and I take
my self
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myself
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 as
example
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 . I tried to live in Japan where the weather is always cold
soI
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so
 had had a
flue
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 all the time .
Then
 I recognised by adapting to
leave
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 in a warm place where I belong.
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,
that
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the demerits include The society
there have
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close
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 mind horizon and limited ways of thinking and
believes
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.
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In
in addition
, they have no Sense of adventure to see what happens and discoveries around the world. In conclusion, it is not awful to live where are you born ,
beside
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 your close relatives
i
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and childhood friends
.but
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but
 the cons outweigh the pros.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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