Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement ?
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developed, developing and poor Correct word choice
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according to
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relavent
to categorization. Most governments spend Correct your spelling
relevant
lot
of money Change the article
a lot
for
railways than public roads. In Change preposition
on
this
essay, I would like to briefly explain the reasons; for fully Linking Words
agree
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agreeing
this
topic.
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a new generation women
, I would like to see about Correct the article-noun agreement
a new generation woman
new generation women
this
point so, railways are Linking Words
eco friendly
Add a hyphen
eco-friendly
transport
mode, which Use synonyms
are
most developed countries have been Change the verb form
is
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use
. Trains engine capacities are higher than the local bus but comparing Change the verb form
using
used
total
amount of public Add an article
the total
transport
buses it is lower. Use synonyms
however
, one train release too low Linking Words
carbondioxide
( Co2) rather than 100 buses and Correct your spelling
carbon dioxide
also
one train can provide more Linking Words
transport
facilities to Use synonyms
plethora
of transporters. In the rails, They Add an article
a plethora
the plethora
use
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own
common way to run and stop. So Correct pronoun usage
their own
due to
that Linking Words
reason
we can Add a comma
reason,
be decrease
traffic Change the verb form
decrease
jam
, which is a great problem Fix the agreement mistake
jams
to
urban areas. Not only that but Change preposition
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also
it Linking Words
decrease
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decreases
consumption
of fuel which is Correct article usage
the consumption
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use
by Change the form of the verb
used
train
engine. So Add an article
a train
been
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being
a
ecofriendly woman, It is a great idea that has been government taken.
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an
eco friendly
nor the head to traffic violence. Add a hyphen
eco-friendly
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for
enter to Colombo Change preposition
apply
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we had to wait Add a comma
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long
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in long
queue
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queues
to
a number of big and small vehicles. Change preposition
for
Someone
Correct your spelling
Some
use
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vehicle
to Add an article
a vehicle
the vehicle
self
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self-transport
transport
and Use synonyms
according to
him/her it's Linking Words
their
required, but Correct pronoun usage
apply
according to
my view Linking Words
if
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apply
you
if we Correct pronoun usage
apply
use
trains Use synonyms
for
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to
transport
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plethora
of people. We can go for our destinate Correct article usage
a plethora
as per
earlier than our time. Change preposition
apply
Therefore
, accidents, Linking Words
time wasting
, fuel consumption and Add a hyphen
time-wasting
Replace the word
environmental
environment
Replace the word
environmental
Fix the agreement mistake
pollution
pollutions
are decreased.
In conclusion, by constructing Railways we have great facilities rather than developing roads and Fix the agreement mistake
pollution
government
can reduce the unnecessary events of accidents and diseases combined with pollution.Correct article usage
the government
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