The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates data about the proportion of the
population
in four Asian nations settling in cities between 1970 to 2020,
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prediction
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for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
, during
this
seventy-year period, Malaysia remains the country with the largest
population
, with all three other countries have more less people on them. In 1970, the
population
of Indonesia were the
least
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,
while
the people of
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, Malaysia and Thailand were considerably higher.
However
, since 2010, the
population
of Indonesia increased gradually,
when
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while
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the
quantity
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of citizens of
Philippines
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the Philippines
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indicated
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fluctuated
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decrease. As can be seen from the graph, from 1990, individuals
of
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Malaysia showed a sharp growth and will have been
keep
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this
trend gradually until 2040. Meanwhile, the
population
of Thailand increased slightly until 2020,
then
will grow step by step.
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