You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or try to get a job.You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: say why she/he would not enjoy going to college.  explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her  suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

Dear Rohit, Hope you’re doing well. I’m writing
this
to reply
your
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to your
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last
letter in which you asked about choosing between
job
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a job
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or
college
. Since I have known you for the
last
twenty
years
, I think, you’ll not enjoy
college
as you’re an introverted person so you’ll not be able to make friends.
Also
,in
college
, there are multiple parties that happen which need a lot of money , which I believe is not worth it for you. I believe you should go for a job since you’re already twenty-one. As I know,
that
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apply
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your father is more than 60
years
old so if you go to
college
now
then
he’ll have to work for some more
years
. Plus, you should go for
a
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an
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Informational technology job, as
this
is the industry which I believe will be in the boom for the next 20-30
years
.
Hence
, it’ll be the best option considering your long-term goals. Hope you’ll like my suggestions. Kind Regards, Jaskaran
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task response
Ensure the letter addresses all the points mentioned in the prompt. The response is partially complete as the advice about suitable types of job is missing.
coherence cohesion
Maintain a clear and logical structure throughout the letter. The coherence and cohesion score is satisfactory, but can be improved with a better organization of ideas.
lexical resource
Expand your range of vocabulary and use more precise and varied words and phrases to express your ideas. The lexical resource score is satisfactory, but could benefit from more sophisticated vocabulary.
grammatical range
Work on grammar accuracy and complexity. Though the letter is generally grammatically correct, there are some minor errors and limited use of complex sentence structures.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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  • thirdly
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  • moreover
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  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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