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the pie chartbelow shows the main reason why agriculture land become less productive. the taable shows how these causes effected three regions of the eorld during the 1990s.

#chartbelow #reason #agriculture #land #taable #three #regions #eorld
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pie chart illustrates the percentage of causes of worldwide
land
degradation
 leading
land
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 agricultural unproductive, and the table gives information about the causes of
land
degradation
 by region divided into four categories in
1990s
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.
Overall
,
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over-grazing
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 takes the biggest amount of causing
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worldwide
land
degradation
while
 other takes the smallest.
Additionally
, Europe
leaded
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 the widest
land
degradation
compered
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compared
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 to North America and Oceania.
initially
, the widest
land
degradation
 is caused by over-grazing at 35%, followed
deforestation
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by deforestation
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 at 30%.
However
,
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 occupies the smallest
land
degradation
 at 7%
while
 over-cultivation has
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 times higher ratio than the former at 28%.
next,
Europe
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occupied the biggest
land
degradation
 at 23%
that
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 deforestation took the majority at 9.8%. eventually, North America as the smallest ratio of
land
degradation
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at 5%, but over grazing rate took the second stage
compered
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compared
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 two countries.
Moreover
, the tiny
land
degradation
 was in Oceania at 0%.
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