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Some people say that now is the best time in history to be Iiving. What is your opinion about this? What other time in history would be interesting to Iive in?

#people #time #history #iive
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The contemporary
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 society show
this
the
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as the
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 best
time
 for living ,
due to
 the availability of all essential material
compare
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compared
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 it
withthe
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the
past century .In
this
essay
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 I will highlight
on
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my opinion about
this
prospective
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perspective
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 and discuss what
time
 in history would be more interesting. On
one
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the one
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 hand,
This
 century with
development
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the development
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 of technology .I believe it is the best
time
 for me to have a convenient living. with the
presentof
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present of
present
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the whole world Become a small village. you could
predicate
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predict
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 the future and
also
 get information about
last
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the last
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 decades. By just
click
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clicking
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 on your screen mobile phone . If we take
the
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artificial
intelligent
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 as an example it becomes a recent newfangled century. you can create a whole city with it
.and
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and
 even show yourself in the future
.another
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Another
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the
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 development of medicine and therapies with
a modern equipment
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modern equipment
a piece of modern equipment
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 and devices for
investigation
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the investigation
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on
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of
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 different
disease
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diseases
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.
Consequently
, the future will be more interesting
by
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in
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this
 and intelligent artificial and other technology In conclusion, I see every history
have
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it
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 own merits and demerits .
Whereas
this
time
 is better for me to live.
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task response
Ensure that your introduction clearly states your opinion about whether now is the best time in history to be living.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas logically and ensure that there is a clear connection between each paragraph.
lexical resource
Broaden your range of vocabulary and use more varied expressions to express your ideas.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structures and grammar to improve clarity and accuracy.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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