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The table below gives infromation on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives infromation on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table provides information about the expenditure of three distinct items by consumers in five different countries in 2002.
Overall
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, the total expenses on food
as well as
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 minerals were higher in Turkey than in the other nations.
Although
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, the expenditure on food and minerals was high in all the nations,
however
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, it was low in other areas.
To begin
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 with,the total sum of tobacco in Ireland was 28.9%. The figure plunged in other sectors. 6.43 and 2.21% in clothing and education respectively.
By contrast
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, Italy and Spain did not show any significant changes as far as their spending is concerned 16.36 and 18.80 respectively.
Nonetheless
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, the expenses reduced to almost half in Italy by 9.0 and 3.20 in other sectors.
However
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, it almost plunged to one-third in Spain with 6.5% and almost 2% in Italy.
Furthermore
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, Sweden and Turkey's expenditure was quite intriguing. 15.7 and more than half on minerals respectively. The figure reduced significantly in other categories with 5.4 and 3.22 in Sweden and 6.65 and 4.35 in Turkey.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "plunged" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumer spending
  • Expenditure
  • Category
  • Tobacco
  • Percentage
  • Comparison
  • Figures
  • Leisure
  • Education
  • Summary
  • Overview
  • Contrast
  • Data
  • Statistics
  • Detailed analysis
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