Write about the following topic: In certain countries, the number of people who use bicycles as the main means of transport is decreasing even though it is beneficial both physically and environmentally. What can be the reasons for this change in preference? How can people be encouraged to use bicycles? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays,
People
are more health conscious, so
that
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in some countries, some
people
are using bicycles as
the
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their
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main transport it is helpful
for
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apply
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both physically and
enviromentally
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environmentally
. The
government
will
be
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apply
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plan two things first is
created
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to create
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seprate
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separate
road
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roads
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for it and
second
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second,
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is
provided
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provide
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on
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apply
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a
remotely
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location. In
this
essay, I will discuss both of
points
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the points
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and how to
encarge
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enlarge
engage
encourage
people
for used
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to use
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bicycles.
Firstly
, when
people
are looking
separate
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for separate
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road
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roads
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for cycling
then
people
more riding. To explain it, on the main
road
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road,
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every
vehicle
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vehicle's
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speed is high as
compare
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compared
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to
cycle
.
People
are not feeling safe on that
road
.
For example
, in the UK
government
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the government
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providing
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provides
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the
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apply
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different
road
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roads
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for both of them so that
people
easly
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easily
going to
office
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the office
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, school and for any other activity.
For
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As
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the
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a
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result,
UK
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the UK
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governement
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government
are
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is
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saving
the
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apply
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billions of dollars
for
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on
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less
uses
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use
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of petrol and diesel.
On the other hand
, If the
government
poviding
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provides
cycle
on
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in
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the
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apply
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remote
location
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locations
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so
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apply
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like
as
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apply
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metro
station
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stations
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, train
station
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stations
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and bus
stand
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stands
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then
people
are
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can
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easily access and cary
this thing
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these things
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.
In other words
, many
people
are not using
because
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it because
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they
are not
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cannot
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afford and take care of it.
For instance
,
Sweden
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Sweden's
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administration
providing
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provides
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the
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a
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mini
cycle
stand
after
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apply
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every 2 KM,
people
are going
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go
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there and scan the bar code
and
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apply
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using
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use
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the
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their
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bike
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bikes
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for
own
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their own
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work and park anywhere
cycle
stand. The
government
of Sweden to
encourge
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encourage
for
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apply
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people
providing
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to provide
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bouns if any employee
reach
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reaches
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in
office
through
cycle
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the cycle
a cycle
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and give
also
time
relaxtion
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relaxation
in
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during
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working hours.
For
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apply
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Hence
, there are 70 %
office
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of office
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emplyoees
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employees
reached
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reach
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in
office
through
cycle
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the cycle
a cycle
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. In conclusion, the
goverment
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government
takes
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should take
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the initiatives
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initiatives
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initiative
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for separate
road
and mini bikecycle stand
also
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and also
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plans some events and competition of awareness
for
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among
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people
and explain the
benifical
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beneficial
reason for
heath
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health
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and
environment
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the environment
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. It
is follow
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follows
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the same philosophy
in
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apply
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all around the world
same
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apply
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as
Sweden
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in Sweden
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so
that
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apply
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people
more
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are more
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attracted
for
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to
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that.
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task response
Ensure your essay addresses all parts of the prompt. You did not discuss the reasons for the decrease in bicycle usage, which was the main focus of the first question.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the organization and coherence of your essay. Present your ideas in a clear and logical manner with appropriate linking words. Use paragraphs to separate different ideas and support them with relevant examples and details.
lexical resource
Expand your vocabulary and use a range of words and phrases to express ideas more precisely. Avoid repetition and strive for variety in your word choices.
grammatical range
Develop your sentence structure and grammar to convey ideas accurately. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement, verb tenses, articles, and sentence construction.
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