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In recent years, some countries have experienced rapid economic development. This has resulted in much higher standards of living in urban areas but not in the country side. This situation may bring some problems for the country as a whole. What are these problems? How might they be reduced?p

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In our world, there are a lot of problem things .These things affect our lives . Economic one of these things .Some people believe that economic development can change countries,
while
 others think it is better to live in town .
This
 essay agrees that economic developments are beneficial .
this
 essay will give the solution. First of all, greeting citizens has the highest economy . To explain that , when people work to develop the economy, they plan the greatest strategies.
For example
, The prince of the Kingdom of Saudi Arabia gives the strategies to develop Saudi cities
such
 as Riyadh, Alola and Trojina .
In addition
 to that , developing countries may attract tourists to the country . In illustrate that , tourists interested in the different country how developed,they visit places changed and become more interested in it.
On the other hand
 ,
developed
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 economy may change
tradition
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traditions
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 and culture for some individuals .
In other words
 , some
affecting for
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affect
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 tourists they think
a
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better way
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changes
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change
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 the culture and it
is effect
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affects
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the
old
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 generation.
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
Include an introduction and conclusion to provide a clear structure to your essay.
lexical resource
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grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to improve clarity and coherence.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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