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Developing countries require help offered by international organization to ensure healthy and sustainable development. Some people think that financial aid is important. Other believe that practical aid and advice is more important. Discuss both these views and give you own opinion.

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International
aid
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 towards
development
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 is being offered to
third world
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third-world
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countries
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, many people argue that financial
aid
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 is key for
development
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,
while
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 others think that
advicing
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advice
 and physical
aid
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are
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is
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 the most important.
This
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 essay will cover both points of view, state their benefits and ultimately decide which one plays the key role in developing
overall
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. In my opinion, both views play an important role in the
developement
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development
 of a
country
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, considering the fact that no
country
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 can't expand or evolve with
lacking
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a lack of
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 funds and incorrect
management
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 of resources in a
country
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 won't contribute to
developing
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development
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 either and
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 one being the key to
overall
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 developement. Funds form part of the basic capabilities in developing a
country
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, as it allows infrastructural
developement
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development
 in a
country
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.
Countries
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 with more money can develop new
building
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buildings
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, with several of them being key for a better lifestyle.
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, CNN contrasted the most remarkable cities in Dubai before and
afternthe
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after the
discovey
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discovery
 of their petroleum mines, the difference was astonishing, the
amount
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 of skyscrapers, hospitals, banks and buildings
overall
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 increased from 1 to 20 buildings per structure after petroleum mines. Another key
for
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to
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 the
devolopment
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development
 of
third world
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third-world
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countries
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 is
management
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,
that
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which
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 includes practical
aid
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 and
advicing
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advising
advice
in
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on
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 the way resources are managed.
This
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 one,
being
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is
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 the key to
a
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apply
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steady and progressive
development
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 in my opinion. Thanks to the financial benefits that good
management
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 can provide to a
country
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,
this
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 can be considered the most important type of
aid
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. To put an example, if a developing
country
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 has an area with incorrect
management
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which
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it
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 produces more problems than actual solutions,
therefore
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 slowing the
proccess
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process
 of
development
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 and consuming
financialfunds
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financial funds
financial-funds
 to resolve the problems in that specific area.
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,
resulting
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 in underdevelopment.
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, financial, practical
aid
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 and
advicing
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advising
advice
 are important for
a
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apply
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correct
development
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 in third world
countries
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. But physical
aid
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 and
advicing
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advice
 in
management
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 are of
most
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the most
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 importance, since correct
management
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 of resources can result in an increase in funds,
therefore
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 resolving the first problem.
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