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Developing countries require help offered by international organization to ensure healthy and sustainable development. Some people think that financial aid is important. Other believe that practical aid and advice is more important. Discuss both these views and give you own opinion.

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International
aid
 towards
development
 is being offered to
third world
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third-world
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countries
, many people argue that financial
aid
 is key for
development
,
while
 others think that
advicing
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advice
 and physical
aid
are
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is
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 the most important.
This
 essay will cover both points of view, state their benefits and ultimately decide which one plays the key role in developing
overall
. In my opinion, both views play an important role in the
developement
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development
 of a
country
, considering the fact that no
country
 can't expand or evolve with
lacking
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a lack of
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 funds and incorrect
management
 of resources in a
country
 won't contribute to
developing
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development
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 either and
this
 one being the key to
overall
 developement. Funds form part of the basic capabilities in developing a
country
, as it allows infrastructural
developement
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development
 in a
country
.
Countries
 with more money can develop new
building
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buildings
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, with several of them being key for a better lifestyle.
For example
, CNN contrasted the most remarkable cities in Dubai before and
afternthe
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after the
discovey
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discovery
 of their petroleum mines, the difference was astonishing, the
amount
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number
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 of skyscrapers, hospitals, banks and buildings
overall
 increased from 1 to 20 buildings per structure after petroleum mines. Another key
for
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to
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 the
devolopment
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development
 of
third world
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third-world
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countries
 is
management
,
that
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which
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 includes practical
aid
 and
advicing
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advising
advice
in
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on
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 the way resources are managed.
This
 one,
being
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is
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 the key to
a
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apply
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steady and progressive
development
 in my opinion. Thanks to the financial benefits that good
management
 can provide to a
country
,
this
 can be considered the most important type of
aid
. To put an example, if a developing
country
 has an area with incorrect
management
which
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it
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 produces more problems than actual solutions,
therefore
 slowing the
proccess
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process
 of
development
 and consuming
financialfunds
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financial funds
financial-funds
 to resolve the problems in that specific area.
Consequently
,
resulting
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this results
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 in underdevelopment.
To conclude
, financial, practical
aid
 and
advicing
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advising
advice
 are important for
a
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apply
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correct
development
 in third world
countries
. But physical
aid
 and
advicing
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advice
 in
management
 are of
most
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the most
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 importance, since correct
management
 of resources can result in an increase in funds,
therefore
 resolving the first problem.
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