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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average British household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average British household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first chart illustrates data regarding the division of
energy
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 in an average home in Britain. The second chart demonstrates the proportional amounts of
greenhouse
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gas
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emissions
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 which are produced by
this
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energy
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 use.
Overall
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, the charts show that the greatest proportion of
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 in a British household is used
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by heating
heating
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 it is water heating which is the largest contributor
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greenhouse
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gas
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emissions
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. In terms of how
energy
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 is divided, cooling demands the lowest
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 share of a British home at just 2%. Lighting and refrigeration are the next least
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-hungry categories, taking up 4% and 7% of
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 respectively. Water heating requires 30%,
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 just over
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 of an average household’s
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 is used by heating. The remainder is accounted for by other appliances. Turning to the ordinary British household’s
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gas
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emissions
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, cooling again reports the lowest figure, contributing 3%. Lighting is responsible for 8%, and refrigeration and heating make almost identical contributions with 14% and 15% respectively. Almost a third of
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gas
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emissions
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 are caused by water heating,
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 other appliances make up the remaining 28%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, greenhouse, gas, emissions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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