The chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1970 to 2020 according to United Nations statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram illustrates how changed

birth

and

death

rates

in Switzerland from 1970 to 2020

according to

United Nations statistics. Starting with 1970, it is observed that over a

million

birth

cases

registered

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were registered

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and

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apply

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death

cases were

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apply

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slighltly

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slightly

lower than

million

. In the next decade,

death

rates

left behind

birth

rates

reaching 1,3

million

, when

birth

rates

stood

unchangable

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unchangeable

. In 1990, both indices rose slightly, but the

birth

rate rose even more and again lagged behind the

death

rate. Starting with 2000, there has been only a growth in the

birth

rate and only a

deacrease

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decrease

in mortality. In 2000,

birth

rates

reached 2,5

millions

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million

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and after

continiously

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continuously

continuous

growth, in 2020, they reached

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apply

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more than 3

million

Besides

death

rates

fall

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fell

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upon

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700

thousands

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thousand

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in 2020.

Overall

birth

rates

rose steadily before and after 2000, when there was a

drammatical

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dramatic

grammatical

increase.

Besides

death

rates

also

rose steadily before 2000, but after they started to decrease.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "besides".

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, death, rates, million with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.

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