The chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1970 to 2020 according to United Nations statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

#information #birth #death #rates #switzerland #nations #statistics #summarise #features #comparisons

The diagram illustrates how changed

birth

and

death

rates

in Switzerland from 1970 to 2020

according to

United Nations statistics. Starting with 1970, it is observed that over a

million

birth

cases

registered

Add a missing verb

were registered

show examples

and

Correct the article-noun agreement

apply

show examples

death

cases were

Correct article usage

apply

show examples

slighltly

Correct your spelling

slightly

lower than

million

. In the next decade,

death

rates

left behind

birth

rates

reaching 1,3

million

, when

birth

rates

stood

unchangable

Correct your spelling

unchangeable

. In 1990, both indices rose slightly, but the

birth

rate rose even more and again lagged behind the

death

rate. Starting with 2000, there has been only a growth in the

birth

rate and only a

deacrease

Correct your spelling

decrease

in mortality. In 2000,

birth

rates

reached 2,5

millions

Change to singular

million

show examples

and after

continiously

Correct your spelling

continuously

continuous

growth, in 2020, they reached

Change preposition

apply

show examples

more than 3

million

Besides

death

rates

fall

Wrong verb form

fell

show examples

upon

Change preposition

show examples

700

thousands

Change to singular

thousand

show examples

in 2020.

Overall

birth

rates

rose steadily before and after 2000, when there was a

drammatical

Correct your spelling

dramatic

grammatical

increase.

Besides

death

rates

also

rose steadily before 2000, but after they started to decrease.

Submitted by croownguuard on Fri Nov 03 2023

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "besides".

▼

Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.

▼

Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, death, rates, million with synonyms.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.

▼

Do you want to check your IELTS essays?

Submit unlimited essays, letters and charts. Sign up right now and start improving your writing skills.

4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Grammar mistakes
 

5 paragraphs

158 words

6.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 checks
Get all the feedback you need to keep improving your charts and letters.
Unlimited Task 2 checks
Practice and perfect your skills with essays.
Personalized suggestions
Know how to boost your score.
Detailed mistakes analysis
Get instant feedback. Spot every mistake.
Topic ideas generator
Get topic-specific ideas to enhance your writing.
Vocabulary helper
Get the right words for any topic.
Progress tracking
Track your writing improvements.

Topic Vocabulary:

birth rate
death rate
fluctuation
demographic
peak
trough
trend
incremental
statistical
longitudinal
population growth
life expectancy
fertility rate
mortality rate
aging population
demographic shift

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

7
band
It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweight the disadvantages?
It is argued that taking risks, both in professional and personal lives is a crucial thing for every individual. In my point of view, taking risks have more advantages rather than disadvantages, such as building a strong person and building a growth mindset to achieve success.
5
band
It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
It is thought by some that only sports persons or musicians are gifted with certain talent, when they born, while others believe that the skills required to become sportsmen and musician can be acquired by any child. While, some people are born with these skills because of their genetic formation, I believe that they can be learned at any age because it only needs individual's determination and practice.
7.5
band
Many people prefer to watch foreign films rather than locally produced films. Why could this be? Should governments give more financial support to local film industries?
It is true that foreign films are more popular in many countries than domestically produced films. There could be several reasons why this is the case, and I believe that governments should promote local film-making by subsidising the industry.
6
band
Some children spend hours every day on their Smartphone. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Technology has taken a toll on everyday life considering the lives of youth are mainly dependent on excessively using gadgets. The crucial contributors to children spending hours on their smartphones are online studies and addictive games. Analysing I believe this is a negative development as it adversely affects the fitness of youngsters as well as distracts them from the real goal.
7.5
band
Some psychologists think that the best way to overcome stress of everyday life is to spend a portion of the day doing absolutely nothing. To what extend do you agree or disagree.
It is considered by some psychologists that the effective method to prevent stress in daily life is to spend the part of the day outrightly doing nothing. In my opinion, I agree that doing nothing at a particular time of the day can put a stop to the level of stress. However, eating healthy food can also reduce the amount of stress encountered on a daily basis.

The chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1970 to 2020 according to United Nations statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweight the disadvantages?

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many people prefer to watch foreign films rather than locally produced films. Why could this be? Should governments give more financial support to local film industries?

Some children spend hours every day on their Smartphone. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Some psychologists think that the best way to overcome stress of everyday life is to spend a portion of the day doing absolutely nothing. To what extend do you agree or disagree.