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The graphs below show current rates of secondary and higher education among people in various parts of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show current rates of secondary and higher education among people in various parts of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar charts depict the proportion of the school-aged population and adults who are educated in secondary
education
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 and higher
education
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, respectively, by categorizing based on gender and four
regions
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 of residency. Looking at the
overall
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 perspective, it is apparent that the percentage of European people who are educated in both
education
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 levels is ranked first among other geographical
regions
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. In terms of the literacy situation of teenagers, the percentage of youths who studied secondary
education
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 in European countries was around double that of Latine America and East Asia, which was around 90% for males and 95% for females. In
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 regard, 45% of young males in Latin America and young females in East Asia were interested in pursuing their
education
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 in secondary school compared to 50% of girls in Latin America and boys in East Asia.
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 rate for SSA was under 15% which was a dramatic issue. With regard to Higher
education
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 tendency, the proportion of people who studied academically in
a higher educational institutes
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higher educational institutes
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was similar to the previous bar chart double that of other
regions
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, which was just below half for females and just above 40% for males. looking at other
regions
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 it is generally understood that the percentage of educated people in other mentioned locations stood at around 20% for women and approximately 25% for men with no considerable difference for the other three categories.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words education, regions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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