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64.Some people think that younger people are not suitable for important positions in government. Others think that it will be a good idea for younger people to take on these positions. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Some say that young
individuals
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 should not participate in important roles in the
government
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,
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 others will argue
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 a good option for younger
people
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 to
work
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 in these positions.
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 essay will argue that
although
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 older
people
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 have more
experience
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 working, younger
people
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 have more creativity. On the one hand, older
people
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 have worked for many years before getting an important position in the
government
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,
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 is because they have more
experience
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 in the job and have done lots of
work
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. But the young
people
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 do not have any
experience
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 in the field, they may be unable to manage large teams and regulations, if the
people
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 in lower levels
work
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 for a longer time than the young person, will not be happy, so it will be difficult for these
people
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 to
work
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 together.
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, in the case of militancy in a country, a General would be more effective in mitigating the situation compared to someone who has recently graduated.
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, I believe that nowadays, young
individuals
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 are really smart and can learn things very quickly.
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, younger
individuals
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 have more creativity and innovation, which is essential in the modern world.
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, because of the continued development of the world, young
people
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 at school and at university learn more things than
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 did before.
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, young
people
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 have better knowledge about what
people
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 really want and are better at looking for problems and finding solutions.
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, young
government
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 health workers successfully raised the awareness of polio vaccines in the country. I believe that, if young
people
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 have the ability, they should be given the opportunity to
work
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 in an important position in the
government
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. In conclusion,
although
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 older
people
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 have worked harder and have more
experience
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 in the field, young
people
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 should be given the opportunity to
work
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 in key positions in the
government
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 because they have better innovation.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Experience and wisdom
  • Fresh perspective
  • Innovative ideas
  • Contemporary issues
  • Energy levels
  • Adaptability
  • Emerging trends
  • Enthusiasm
  • Stability
  • Maintaining the status quo
  • Maturity and responsibility
  • Risk-taking
  • Far-reaching consequences
  • In touch with
  • Representative governance
  • Historical examples
  • Proven track record
  • Changing dynamics
  • Fresh leadership
  • Modern issues
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