The bar chart shows the percentage of adults who were overweight or obese (too fat or much too fat) in one country from 1965 to 2015.
The bar
chart
shows the information on ratio of adults who were overweight or obese in one country between 1965 and 2015.
Overall
, it can be seen that the rate
in 2015 was the highest percentage
of all rates and the rate
in 1965 was the lowest percentage
.
First
of all, in the first
20 years between 1965 and 1985, the percentages were nearly the same, it can be seen the percentages of three rates which were not changed at this
time. In 1995, however
, the
Change preposition
for the
first
time after 30 years the chart
shows the first
rate
in 1965, it increased by 10%, up from nearly 50% to over 60%. At this
moment, the rate
tended to increase in the near future. In 2005, it went up to over 70%, this
percentage
can show that being overweight was a problem which is uncontrolled.
In 2015, it was 80% and that was the highest rate
of all percentages. After 50 years the first
rate
had appeared in the chart
, and the rate
increased by nearly 40%, it was the ratio that needed to be resolved in the near future.
Looking back at the chart
, in the near future, the percentage
would
increase more and more and we need to find a solution Wrong verb form
will
for
that problem.Change preposition
to
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