The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram compares the proportion of the weekly expenditure in the family in two different years.
Overall
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it is clear that
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the percentage of the cost of food saw a massive drop,
while
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the money spent on entertainment experienced a significant rise. Looking at the diagram more closely, one can see that the expenditure on cooking sharply decreased from 35% to 17%,
while
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the leisure fee was raised from roughly 8% to 22%.
In addition
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, the house spending is almost doubled, the same as the transport cost.
Furthermore
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, there are some categories that have a small drop, the spending on clothing, private goods and power is reduced by almost half the number in 1998.
Finally
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, the expenditure on household goods remained in the same proportion.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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