The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
The line graph provides information about the modifications of copper, nickel and zinc during every month in 2014.
Overall
, it can be seen a significant downward trend which spreads on Nickel.
Also
, it’s noticeable that copper had a general slight decline in
price
changes during the period of time.
However
, zinc showed an upward trend in modifications of cost. Nickel had a dramatic increase from January to
June
(from 6 to -3 per
cent
). After, the data showed a slight rise till the period of time when the
price
remained stable (from
June
to September). The
price
fell slightly to -1 per
cent
from September to October.
At the end
of 2014, it could be seen that the
price
went up considerably from October to December (from -2 to 1 per
cent
). Copper grew gradually from the beginning of the year till May (from 2 to -0.5 per
cent
). After that, it climbed gradually to 1 per
cent
in
June
and remained constant till September. There was a slight jump till the end of the year (from 1 to 0,5 per
cent
). On another hand, zinc showed an increase from
June
to February (the
price
went up by 2 per
cent
).
Also
, the metal showed a
sharply
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drop of 4 per
cent
from February to
June
.
In addition
, the data remained stable from
June
to October. After, the metal provided a significant soar till the end of 2014 (from -1 to 2 per
cent
).
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly change
  • prices of metals
  • trend
  • spike
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • sharp rise
  • sharp fall
  • stability
  • volatility
  • data points
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • external factors
  • influences
  • market dynamics
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