Young people are often influenced by their peers. This is called peer group pressure. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
Indubitably,
the
young individuals are highly influenced by their peers. Correct article usage
apply
This
peer pressure not only have
myriad benefits but several bad consequences Correct subject-verb agreement
has
also
. However
, I will elucidate my opinions in the upsurging
paragraphs.
Correct word choice
upcoming
Nevertheless
, having a good friend circle not only provides joy to a young one
but also
keep
Correct subject-verb agreement
keeps
one
motivated as a
alone person cannot cope Change the article
an
up
with different challenges himself /herself.Change preposition
apply
One
must have a peer group in order to keep oneself active that further
help
him/her in handling the problems or different situations. Correct subject-verb agreement
helps
for
instance
A boy from Surrey, Canada was forced by his friends to Add a comma
instance,
give
audition in a singing contest,he not only Verb problem
apply
one
that competition but also
become
a famous singer Wrong verb form
became
also
known as Drake.
Furthermore
, not every individual in world
Add an article
the world
have
good peers Change the verb form
has
as a consequence
of which one
has to face a number of problems in his/her life.To vindicate- according to
an article published in a national dailyChange preposition
apply
,
reports that a boy nearly Remove the comma
apply
of
sixteen yearsChange preposition
apply
,
was the Remove the comma
apply
proper
disciplined boy Change the adjective
properly
according to
the school and the parents but Ilas
he got promoted to Correct your spelling
as
next
class, his peer group changed Correct article usage
the next
as a result
his habits got completely changed. After watching this
his parents asked about the reasons he ignored them. Then
after
two or three weeks later police came to their house to arrest him in case of theft and murder during the interrogation he admitted that he had Change preposition
apply
done
Verb problem
made
this
mistake coming
under the pressure of his friends,who got bailed as all the theft money was recovered from his room and even the murder was done by him. Now, he is imprisoned for twelve years.
Verb problem
apply
To conclude
, one
must have friends in his/her life but he/she must choose them wisely as it further
decide
their future Change the verb form
decides
either
it will be troublesome or a prosperous Correct word choice
whether
one
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