The charts show the percentage of boys and girls aged 5-14 taking part in cultural activities and sports in Australia in 2003.

The charts show the percentage of boys and girls aged 5-14 taking part in cultural activities and sports in Australia in 2003.
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The charts below give information about the proportion of both genders aged from 5 to 14 participating in cultural events and
sports
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in Australia in 2003. The above bar chart illustrates the percentage of
boys
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and
girls
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joining four different kinds of activities
whereas
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the below shows only the rate for doing
sports
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in both genders. As can be seen from the graphs, most
students
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preferred
sports
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to other activities shown by a much higher number of
boys
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and
girls
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while
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we can see that fewer female
students
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took part in
sports
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than male ones. It is clear from the first chart that there were four main kinds of outside school hours activities for
students
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namely drama, dancing, singing and playing musical instruments.
According to
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the data, the number of
girls
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who like to dance was the highest with 25
girls
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compared to only 2
boys
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.
However
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, there were more
boys
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playing the musical instruments than
girls
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.
In addition
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, the numbers of
boys
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and
girls
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were nearly the same for
students
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who attended drama club and singing. The second chart depicts the total number of
boys
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and
girls
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doing
sports
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in 2003. As is observed, more
boys
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like to play
sports
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compared to
girls
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with 70 out of 55
students
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sports, boys, girls, students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • charts
  • percentage
  • boys
  • girls
  • aged
  • taking part
  • cultural activities
  • sports
  • Australia
  • 2003
  • participation
  • trends
  • differences
  • compare
  • summarize
  • findings
  • reasons
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