The bar chart below shows the top 10 countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
The bar chart below illustrates the ranking of ten
countries
according to
the amount of electricity
production
and consumption in 2014. The unit is denoted by billion kWh.
As is observed, China and the United States were the top two countries
with the highest electricity
usage and production
while
Korea had the lowest rank. The other countries
had the same pattern of higher production
but for Germany, its consumption was higher than production
.
It is clear that
China produced the most electricity
in 2014 at 5,398 and their citizens consumed almost the same amount of 5,322. America ranked second by 4,099 billion kWh and 3,866 of both manufacturing and consuming electricity
respectively. In addition
, Russia, Japan, India and Canada correspondently ranked third,
fourth, fifth and sixth place with the range of electricity
produced and consumed from under 1000 to more than 600. Furthermore
, the last
four countries
accounted for producing and using less than 600 billion kWh with France, Brazil, Germany and Korea. However
, only Germany stood out by having the
smaller number of Correct article usage
a
electricity
production
than the number of people using it by 526,6 compared with 582,5.Submitted by yennhicao24 on
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