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Many people today use their phones for sending texts more than talking. What are the reasons for this? are there more advantages than disadvatages ?

One of the widely discussed topics nowadays is
phone
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phones
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 and
another digital technologies
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another digital technology
other digital technologies
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. It is undeniable that
communication
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 become
essential
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an essential
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 part of our life.
However
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, there is a question on whether sending texts by phone
more
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is more
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 popular than talking today. Commonly held belief that talking is very comfortable to compare sending
message
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a message
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.
Like
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example
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example,
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 they point
that
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by
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apply
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talking situations or dialogue
were
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 understandable and more reliable.
Because conversations
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Conversations
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 assist
people
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 aware
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of peoples
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peoples
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people's
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 real
emotion
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emotions
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 and
expression
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expressions
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 and my messaging or sending
people
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 can't notice and time may be lost.
Furthermore
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,
people
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 may
want
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want to
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 hear
real
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the real
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voice
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voices
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 of
human
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humans
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 who speak with
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them
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.
For instance
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, the
people
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 who live far from their close human or when you just want to know who
this
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 guy
by
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is by
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 talking. It is a huge advantage, since
people
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social
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are social
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 organisms and
want
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want to
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 communicate with others.
On the other hand
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, conversation can consume
very
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 big amount of time.
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,
people
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 occasionally forget their
works
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work
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 just
due to
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 the talking or meetings with very close
people
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.
Moreover
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, when civils use sending like
communication
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people
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 can earn advantages like brief and understandable
informations
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information
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 for them. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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 bringing all which mentioned above I can confirm that nowadays civilization
have
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has
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 a rush and to them more reliable communications by sending,
therefore
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people
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 lose their
communication
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 skills. I think
this
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,
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 because our difference from animals is that we can communicate, give
a rescues
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rescues
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, produce emotions, hate, love and learn. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 it is
a
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issuse
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issue
 that we probably can't tackle, but at least we must
talking
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talk
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 to
don't
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not
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 lose our ability to
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communication
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communicate
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 with
human
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humans
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 in real life.

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Task Achievement
The essay veers off the main topic and fails to fully address the question prompt. Make sure to focus on discussing the reasons why people use their phones for sending texts more than talking.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay lacks a clear structure and coherence. It is important to organize your ideas in a logical manner and use appropriate linking devices to improve the overall coherence and cohesion of the essay.
Lexical Resource
The essay demonstrates a limited range of vocabulary and lacks variety in expressions. Try to incorporate more advanced vocabulary and varied sentence structures to enhance your lexical resource.
Grammatical Range
There are several grammatical errors and inconsistencies throughout the essay. Pay closer attention to grammar and sentence structure to improve your grammatical range and accuracy.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • text
  • texts
  • talk
  • phone
  • message
  • call
  • fast
  • easy
  • cheap
  • time
  • busy
  • reply
  • later
  • record
  • short
  • clear
  • tone
  • meaning
  • misread
  • friend
  • family
  • work
  • home
  • shy
  • nervous
  • help
  • group
  • plan
  • reach
  • everyone
  • care
  • rule
  • use
  • careful
  • balance
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