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The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#aim #science #people #lives
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It is true that recent
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 improvements have made it possible for humankind to utilize it in various areas from improving individuals living situations to endangering human life by damaging … directly or indirectly. I absolutely agree with the idea that acquired knowledge must contribute to human well-being.
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 I will outline my opinion and my reasons for my agreement. I believe that there are various reasons for the necessity of implementing
science
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 for society's development.
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, new
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 should benefit
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society or provide a solution for an unsolved problem.
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, every day people are exposed to various viruses and
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bacteria
 which lead to health
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 and
disease
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.
Science
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 improvement could find a remedy to treat these diseases.
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, scientists could invent novel electronic devices and equipment in numerous areas which all could provide nations with more comfort and well-being, like all the appliances and domestic devices that all humans are utilizing and benefiting.
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, there are various reasons why it could be harmful for
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humankind to make different utilization of the acquired knowledge. New viruses could be created in labs to infect the individuals of a nation and contribute to people's health problems followed by the expenditure which could be a burden for the government since authorities have to take measures for treating the affected people ultimately leading
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country's economic recession which could cause significant loses for businesses and society . In conclusion, my opinion is that
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 should solely help a country's progress and provide new facilities for the communities
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • technological advancements
  • medical discoveries
  • life-changing inventions
  • innovations
  • solutions to human problems
  • enhancing quality of life
  • improvement of healthcare
  • transportation
  • communication
  • agriculture
  • energy sectors
  • eradication of diseases
  • prolongation of life expectancy
  • global challenges
  • climate change
  • overpopulation
  • food security
  • developed world
  • underprivileged communities
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