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The graph bellow shows the number of visitors to three museums between 2000 and 2005.

The graph bellow shows the number of visitors to three museums between 2000 and 2005.
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The graph illustrates the number of people who
visit
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visited
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 the
thre
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three
 museum namely Met,New
Yourk
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York
,Edu Tokyo,National,China between the six years
period
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 from 2000 to 2005 and it was
millions
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 of visitors.
To begin
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 with,
in
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from
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 2000 to 2001 the
Met
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number of Met
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 New
yourk
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york
your
 visitors
12
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was 12
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millions
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million
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 and declined in 2001
at
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to
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 6
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millions
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million
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 and Edo Tokyo
Almost
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was Almost
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 level in
this
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period
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 at 13
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millions
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million
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moreover
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National
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the National
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 China people
very
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were very
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 low
as
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apply
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campare
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compare
compared
 to
other
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the other
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 two countries during
this
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period
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at
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apply
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6 and 7
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millions
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million
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.
Furthermore
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,
in
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from
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 2002 to 2003 individuals of Tokyo visited
in
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apply
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2002 at 9
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millions
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million
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 but it was less
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last
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the last
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 two years and China increased
their
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its
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visitors
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visitor's
visitors'
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 number in 2003 .
On the other hand
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,
in
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from
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 2004 to 2005 all countries increased their numbers of tourists and now it was 15,10 and 14 throughout
this
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period
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 it was sharply higher .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words period, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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