The graph bellow shows the number of visitors to three museums between 2000 and 2005.
The graph illustrates the number of people who
visit
the Wrong verb form
visited
thre
museum namely Met,New Correct your spelling
three
Yourk
,Edu Tokyo,National,China between the six years Correct your spelling
York
period
from 2000 to 2005 and it was millions
of visitors.
To begin
with,in
2000 to 2001 the Change preposition
from
Met
New Correct quantifier usage
number of Met
yourk
visitors Correct your spelling
york
your
12
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was 12
millions
and declined in 2001 Change to singular
million
at
6 Change preposition
to
millions
and Edo Tokyo Change to singular
million
Almost
level in Add a missing verb
was Almost
this
period
at 13 millions
Change to singular
million
moreover
National
China people Correct article usage
the National
very
low Add a missing verb
were very
as
Change preposition
apply
campare
to Correct your spelling
compare
compared
other
two countries during Correct article usage
the other
this
period
at
6 and 7 Change preposition
apply
millions
.
Change to singular
million
Furthermore
,in
2002 to 2003 individuals of Tokyo visited Change preposition
from
in
2002 at 9 Change preposition
apply
millions
but it was less Change to singular
million
last
two years and China increased Correct article usage
the last
their
Correct pronoun usage
its
visitors
number in 2003 .
Change to a genitive case
visitor's
visitors'
On the other hand
,in
2004 to 2005 all countries increased their numbers of tourists and now it was 15,10 and 14 throughout Change preposition
from
this
period
it was sharply higher .Submitted by rs55169611 on
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