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Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society? You should write at least 250 words.

#students #science #subjects #university #countries #effects #society
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There is a controversial perspective heating up a debate over the fact that in many nations,
students
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 have a tendency to select other
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instead
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 of
science
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subjects
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.
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 alarming problem. Without a shadow of a doubt,
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people
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's lives quite depend on some aspects of
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,
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 have to recognize that
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 are comparatively difficult to digest. Because
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subjects
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 are interconnected, as a results in order to have a good understanding of that,
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 have to
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sustainable knowledge foundation to link them together.
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, so as to to have a wide range of
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, namely
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,
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 need to have a good head of math
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before
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and
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interests
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 in some practical phenomenon.
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, I would contend that it is one of the outstanding justifications that
students
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 do not tend to pick
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subjects
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.
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 absorbing
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 are relatively complicated for
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, it is unfair that if the world
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 not have a
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 of great scientific accomplishments, it can lead to a wealth of grave problem, especially in
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 field.
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 the fact that there are abundant achievements thanks to
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 of
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 about medicines which can help
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 in whole the world overcome serious diseases.
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, in 2019,
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 was one of the urgent
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 which claimed millions of lives so if
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the vaccine
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was
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 not created by eminent scientists,
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had
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 had to suffer a dire epidemic for many years.
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 that
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 through if not
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science
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 is in
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 aspect. In conclusion, learning
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 can pose a lot of difficulties for
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 in many states but if the world does not have a flood of excellent successes
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, it can contribute to some pressing influences in
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’s lives.
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task response
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coherence cohesion
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lexical resource
Your lexical resource is sufficient, but you can enhance it by using a wider range of vocabulary. Try to incorporate more specific and varied terms related to the topic of science subjects and their importance.
grammatical range
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deter
  • promotion
  • opportunities
  • role models
  • lucrative
  • employment
  • gender stereotypes
  • societal norms
  • access to information
  • technological stagnation
  • shortage
  • skilled professionals
  • innovation
  • healthcare sector
  • workforce
  • global competitiveness
  • advancements
  • economic growth
  • public health services
  • environmental sciences
  • combat climate change
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