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The chart below shows three different crimes and the number of cases committed between 1970 and 2005 in England and Wales. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows three different crimes and the number of cases committed between 1970 and 2005 in England and Wales. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The provided line chart reflects different types of criminal actions,
as well as
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, the number of each case that had been committed in a span of 35
years
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 from 1970 to 2005 in two European countries.
According to
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 the given graph, there were three kinds of crimes: car theft, house burgling, and street robbery.
Overall
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, after a thorough analysis of the provided line chart, it can be plainly viewed that car theft was in the first place the most commonly committed crime across the
years
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,
while
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 street robbery came
last
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.
In addition
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, house burgling underwent several fluctuations, before
it
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its
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 rates moderately decreased. In the beginning, concerning car theft, rates were progressively uplifting in the course of 20
years
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 between 1970 and 1990, which reached 1
million
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cases
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 in the year 1990.
However
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, in 1995, it experienced a sharp rise ( scored 1.60
million
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cases
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), before hitting a free fall in 2005, which recorded 1
million
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cases
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.
Furthermore
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, moving to house burgling, witnessed variations over a period of 30
years
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(from 1970 to 2000),and hit 0.60
million
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 in 2000,
this
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 period was followed by a plummet to 0.45
million
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cases
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 in 2005.
Moreover
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, it is worth noticing that street robbery remained static from 1970 to 1990, before witnessing a mild upward trend to 0.20
million
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cases
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 in 2000 and 2005, simultaneously.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, million, cases with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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