The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The tables compare the average
temperature
and daytime hours in two big cities
during
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the 28th until the 30th of December 2018.
Overall
,
throught
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through
throughout
the weekend, the sun rose and set
in
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at
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the same time in both cities.
Although
, London received the biggest
temperature
gap
in
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the 29th,
while
Sydney
in the 30th. In
Sydney
, the sun rose early in the morning at the average time
at
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of
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5.45 a.m.,
while
it set
at
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a little past 8 p.m
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Whereas
, London's daytime was almost twice shorter than
Sydney
which is 8 hours of daylight
in
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on
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average. People who live in London
,
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experienced a big difference in
temperature
during
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the
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Saturday,
where
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when
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it reached its highest and lowest throughout the weekend, 13 and 3
degrees
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celsius
respectively. The other
the
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two days and nights were at an average of 10
degrees
and 5
degrees
.
However
,
Sydney
's average maximum and minimum
temperature
was at 29
degrees
and 18
degrees
respectively, when
Suday
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Saturday
was the hottest and Friday was the coldest.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, sydney, degrees with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "set" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • temperatures
  • hours of daylight
  • comparison
  • London
  • Sydney
  • December 2018
  • weekend
  • information
  • data
  • summarise
  • select
  • report
  • features
  • analysis
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