In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Some people think that it is required to build new
railways
for Use synonyms
having
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apply
the
fast transportation between cities, Correct article usage
apply
although
others believe that current lines should be improved. Linking Words
However
, Developing the old infrastructures despite, building new ones if Linking Words
is
required may be the best Unnecessary verb
apply
strategy
.
Constructing the new Use synonyms
railways
is Use synonyms
very
complicated process. First of all , it requires Add an article
a very
much
financial Correct quantifier usage
a lot of
supports
. Fix the agreement mistake
support
For example
, for providing materials and human resources billions of dollars should be expended. Linking Words
On the other hand
, all of the old infrastructure will Linking Words
be
remain unusable. If Unnecessary verb
apply
this
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strategy
Use synonyms
be
adopted the whole of the Change the verb form
is
railways
that the Use synonyms
much amounts
of money Fix the agreement mistake
amount
have
dedicated to Unnecessary verb
apply
build
them will be wasted. Change the verb form
building
Finally
, Linking Words
this
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replacment
may Correct your spelling
replacement
caused
some Change the verb form
cause
be caused
troubles
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trouble
to
the people. These troubles may happen when people Change preposition
for
wanted
to change their transportation Wrong verb form
want
habbits
.
Correct your spelling
habits
On the other hand
, altering the previous lines is not logical. Linking Words
This
approach may be caused Linking Words
to
expending Change preposition
by
the
Correct article usage
a
big
amount of money, despite making old infrastructures Correct word choice
large
abounded
. Wrong verb form
abound
In addition
, for pursuing Linking Words
this
project, the environment may be harmed deeply. Acres of the jungles might be destroyed. Linking Words
Also
, the process may be caused Linking Words
to
driying the lakes. The third Change preposition
by
strategy
, which is improving the old Use synonyms
railways
, Use synonyms
while
constructing the new ones, if necessary, is much implementable. In many cases, developing previous instructions are applicable. Linking Words
For example
, by replacing the materials, the function will be improved fundamentally. Linking Words
Moreover
, in many cases, it is not required to develop. Many of the lines Linking Words
have
not Add a missing verb
do have
much
passengers, so the improvement is unnecessary.
In conclusion, constructing the new infrastructure when is required Change the quantifier
many
while
improving current ones is the best Linking Words
strategy
. Use synonyms
This
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strategy
could prevent Use synonyms
from
much money Change preposition
apply
wasting
and Verb problem
apply
the
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apply
environment
Replace the word
environmental
damages
.Fix the agreement mistake
damage
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