In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people think that it is required to build new
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fast transportation between cities,
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others believe that current lines should be improved.
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, Developing the old infrastructures despite, building new ones if
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required may be the best
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. Constructing the new
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complicated process. First of all , it requires
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financial
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, for providing materials and human resources billions of dollars should be expended.
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, all of the old infrastructure will
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remain unusable. If
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adopted the whole of the
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of money
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dedicated to
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them will be wasted.
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replacment
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some
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the people. These troubles may happen when people
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to change their transportation
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, altering the previous lines is not logical.
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amount of money, despite making old infrastructures
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, for pursuing
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project, the environment may be harmed deeply. Acres of the jungles might be destroyed.
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driying the lakes. The third
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, which is improving the old
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constructing the new ones, if necessary, is much implementable. In many cases, developing previous instructions are applicable.
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, by replacing the materials, the function will be improved fundamentally.
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, in many cases, it is not required to develop. Many of the lines
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not
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passengers, so the improvement is unnecessary. In conclusion, constructing the new infrastructure when is required
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improving current ones is the best
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environment
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damages
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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