Your sister has asked you to organize the music for her wedding at the end of next month. Write a letter to your friend who is an amateur musician. In your letter ● ask your friend to perform at the wedding ● describe why he/she would be suitable for this event ● explain how your friend will be compensated if they agree.

Dear Thomas, I am giving you an invitation
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my sibling's event to perform at my house. When my
sister
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marriage
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been fixed
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one week I decided to give a surprise party.
However
, I was bewildered
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a special singer but suddenly your name
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to my mind.
Besides
this
, many performances you had done in our college and win prizes.
Although
, you have a platform to
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on the television shows and I enjoy your voice quality whenever I
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your songs. The quality of your voice is
as
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versatile singer and you have
also
experienced
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different events.
Furthermore
, many of my family members
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your soothing voice. I think you would do best performance on my sister's marriage if you
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on
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the function I will be grateful
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your presence.
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, I can arrange your pick and drop facilities.
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, an accommodation facility will
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in the PC Hotel and three times
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also
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. I am looking forward to hearing from you as soon as possible. Warm wishes,
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Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and supporting details.
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Use a more formal and appropriate greeting and closing for a letter.
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Review grammar rules to improve sentence structure and eliminate errors.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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