The chart below shows the numbers of three types of visitor to a museum between 1997 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the numbers of three types of visitor to a museum between 1997 and 2012. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The chart demonstrates how many people visited a
musem
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museum
during a 15-year interval up to 2012, which is based on three different kinds of visitors. In general, what stands out from the chart is that the least amount of
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investigation belonged to special visitors;
while
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adults by far has consisted the
greast
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greatest
bunch of invitees. Focusing on adults as the largest group, by a glance throughout the diagram,
it is clear that
adults with at least 300,100
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in 1997 were
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in the first rank;
also
,
this
pattern continued within that time. In 2007, an upturn took place in the figure and
this
number surged to more than 400,00 visitants, which was the peak of
this
chart.
Moreover
, during the next five years, it dropped to 380,000 in 2012 which was still the maximum amount in comparison with the other visitor cohorts. Turning to the special exhibition entrants and adolescents, it can be seen that the former was the smallest group from 1997 to 2012 and the growth of visitors number was deeply minor; so,
at the end
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only 14,000 people were added to the initial comers.
While
, the latter was 120,000 at
first,
which was noticeable;
then
, it started to level off gradually to approximately 82,000 folks in 2012.
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