The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.
The given map illustrates the Canterbury
town
in which a novel education location is going to be built and Use synonyms
furthermore
, two feasible places are shown for Linking Words
this
construction.
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Overall
, there are two potential spaces for school, the first is in the countryside, near the main path Linking Words
whereas
the second is in the Linking Words
town
centre.
On the one hand, the first preferred site, s1, would be located in the suburb on the northeast of Canterbury. Use synonyms
Firstly
, It is an advantage that the environment is green there but it will lead to damage to the environment. Linking Words
Secondly
, Sturry will be near to the school Linking Words
while
Chartham will be too far, so it is not fairly for Chartham's citizens and Linking Words
this
is another disadvantage.
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On the other hand
, the next favoured position, s2, is expected to be constructed within the Linking Words
Town
Center and south of the university. Use synonyms
Initially
, Linking Words
According to
Linking Words
this
plan s2 will be surrounded by a residential area Linking Words
consequently
, students will use welfare facilities and there is no traffic zone around Linking Words
this
. Linking Words
Finally
, Sturry with 5 km and Chartham with 7 km, have an approximately equal distance to Linking Words
Use synonyms
Town
Center via the main road so, prospective students will be treated fairly.Correct article usage
the Town
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