The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.

The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.
The given map illustrates the Canterbury
town
in which a novel education location is going to be built and
furthermore
, two feasible places are shown for
this
construction.
Overall
, there are two potential spaces for school, the first is in the countryside, near the main path
whereas
the second is in the
town
centre. On the one hand, the first preferred site, s1, would be located in the suburb on the northeast of Canterbury.
Firstly
, It is an advantage that the environment is green there but it will lead to damage to the environment.
Secondly
, Sturry will be near to the school
while
Chartham will be too far, so it is not fairly for Chartham's citizens and
this
is another disadvantage.
On the other hand
, the next favoured position, s2, is expected to be constructed within the
Town
Center and south of the university.
Initially
,
According to
this
plan s2 will be surrounded by a residential area
consequently
, students will use welfare facilities and there is no traffic zone around
this
.
Finally
, Sturry with 5 km and Chartham with 7 km, have an approximately equal distance to
Town
Correct article usage
the Town
show examples
Center via the main road so, prospective students will be treated fairly.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • contrast
  • location
  • accessibility
  • residential areas
  • facilities
  • traffic
  • transportation
  • environment
  • cost
  • feasibility
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