The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.

The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.
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The given map illustrates the Canterbury
town
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in which a novel education location is going to be built and
furthermore
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, two feasible places are shown for
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construction.
Overall
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, there are two potential spaces for school, the first is in the countryside, near the main path
whereas
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the second is in the
town
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centre. On the one hand, the first preferred site, s1, would be located in the suburb on the northeast of Canterbury.
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, It is an advantage that the environment is green there but it will lead to damage to the environment.
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, Sturry will be near to the school
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Chartham will be too far, so it is not fairly for Chartham's citizens and
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is another disadvantage.
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, the next favoured position, s2, is expected to be constructed within the
Town
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Center and south of the university.
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,
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this
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plan s2 will be surrounded by a residential area
consequently
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, students will use welfare facilities and there is no traffic zone around
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.
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, Sturry with 5 km and Chartham with 7 km, have an approximately equal distance to
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Town
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the Town
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Center via the main road so, prospective students will be treated fairly.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • contrast
  • location
  • accessibility
  • residential areas
  • facilities
  • traffic
  • transportation
  • environment
  • cost
  • feasibility
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