The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.
The given map illustrates the Canterbury
town
in which a novel education location is going to be built and furthermore
, two feasible places are shown for this
construction.
Overall
, there are two potential spaces for school, the first is in the countryside, near the main path whereas
the second is in the town
centre.
On the one hand, the first preferred site, s1, would be located in the suburb on the northeast of Canterbury. Firstly
, It is an advantage that the environment is green there but it will lead to damage to the environment. Secondly
, Sturry will be near to the school while
Chartham will be too far, so it is not fairly for Chartham's citizens and this
is another disadvantage.
On the other hand
, the next favoured position, s2, is expected to be constructed within the Town
Center and south of the university. Initially
, According to
this
plan s2 will be surrounded by a residential area consequently
, students will use welfare facilities and there is no traffic zone around this
. Finally
, Sturry with 5 km and Chartham with 7 km, have an approximately equal distance to Town
Center via the main road so, prospective students will be treated fairly.Correct article usage
the Town
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