The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
The given chart shows that Indonesia
raised
stable every year. And in the Verb problem
rose
future
it would Add a comma
future,
be raise
by Change the verb form
be raised
predictions
.Thailand approximately
standing on one level all the years, but at the start of 2030 it Rephrase
has been
gonna
be Wrong verb form
is going to
extrimely
raise in peop;Correct your spelling
extremely
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population in cities.Malaysia raising only up for each year,Correct your spelling
the
include
the future Change the form of the verb
including
predictions
. Philippines
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The Philippines
the
most unstable Add a missing verb
is the
compare
to other countries. The statistics that Replace the word
compared
shows
Malaysia and Indonesia Change the verb form
show
looks
Change the verb form
look
same
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the same
to
each other, they Change preposition
as
are
both had Unnecessary verb
apply
uncertain
start and after 1990,(40% and 20%) had Add an article
an uncertain
the uncertain
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an extremely
extremely
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extreme
raise
in Correct your spelling
rise
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the percantages
percantages
of Correct your spelling
percentages
percentage
population
in cities. And both their Add an article
the population
predictions
shows
that in the future they Change the verb form
show
gonna
only mount. Thailand after every Wrong verb form
are going to
raise
in 20 years, goes to stable Correct your spelling
rise
to
the next 30 years, based on Change preposition
for
diagram
. After the big rise in Add an article
the diagram
a diagram
1990
the statistic went stable until 2020. Phillipines at the start had the biggest rise Add a comma
1990,
compare
to other countries , but went down sharply till Wrong verb form
compared
the
2010. And after Change the article
apply
that
it was slowly going up, and Add a comma
that,
according to
predictions
it is also
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