The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 compared with 2015.

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the

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information about one country

forword

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forward

catagory

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category

in 2015 and 2016. It is clear from the graph that the all categories exported were

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with

incresing

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increasing

years.

According to

what is shown, the majority of petroleum products

export

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about 60

milion

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million

and 62

milion

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million

in 2015 and 2016.

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highest amount of

earning

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from engineered goods by 58$ and 61$ between 2015 and 2016.

Moreover

, the lowest export in 2015 was textiles around 28

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billion

bilion

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billion

while

in 2016

textiling

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textile

texting

and agricultural products export almost equal value by 31$.

Whereas

, gams and

jeweller

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have earning

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bilion

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billion

in 2015 and 40

bilion

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billion

in 2016.

To sum up

, we could say that

value

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the value

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exported in 2016

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than

2015

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