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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 compared with 2015.
#value #country #exports #categories
These bar
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 show
the
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apply
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information about one country
forword
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forward
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catagory
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category
 in 2015 and 2016. It is clear from the graph that the all categories exported were
increase
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increased
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 with
incresing
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increasing
 years.
According to
 what is shown, the majority of petroleum products
export
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exported
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 about 60
milion
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million
 and 62
milion
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million
 in 2015 and 2016.
Second
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 highest amount of
earning
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earnings
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 from engineered goods by 58$ and 61$ between 2015 and 2016.
Moreover
, the lowest export in 2015 was textiles around 28
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billion
bilion
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billion
while
 in 2016
textiling
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textile
texting
 and agricultural products export almost equal value by 31$.
Whereas
, gams and
jeweller
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jewellers
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have earning
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earned
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 41
bilion
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billion
 in 2015 and 40
bilion
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billion
 in 2016.
To sum up
, we could say that
value
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the value
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 exported in 2016
more
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was more
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 than
2015
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in 2015
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