These days, more and more business meetings are taking place online. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?
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due to
development of the technology. Linking Words
Also
organizing business Linking Words
meetings
via Use synonyms
zoom
, skype, and team become a common thing because of technology improvement. Capitalize word
Zoom
However
, virtual business Linking Words
meetings
have merits Use synonyms
as well as
demerits. Linking Words
This
essay will elaborate Linking Words
both
good and bad.
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on both
Firstly
, organizing gatherings through technological apps can save money and time Linking Words
of
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for
the
people because ifCorrect article usage
apply
,
we need to physically be at one place for the gatherings, there will be travelling Remove the comma
apply
cost
and takes massive amount of time. Fix the agreement mistake
costs
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, thanks to computers and other automation there Linking Words
is
no Correct subject-verb agreement
are
such
things. Linking Words
Furthermore
, it is Linking Words
good
way to Change the article
a good
cutdown
the other expenses like venue Correct your spelling
cut down
cost
, resources like leaflets, handouts and food expenses. Fix the agreement mistake
costs
Additionally
, anyone can attend Linking Words
to
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apply
the
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apply
meetings
from Use synonyms
ant
corner of the world, Correct your spelling
every
Therefore
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has
easy
task because of virtual Add an article
an easy
meetings
.
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Secondly
, there are some demerits of distance gatherings which Linking Words
held
through computers and other Add a missing verb
are held
electronical
devices using Correct your spelling
electronic
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the internet
internet
. Some of them are easy to hack and destroy or leak Capitalize word
Internet
the
important information. Cyber attacks are Correct article usage
apply
more
popular and common thing these days. Add an article
a more
Moreover
, Linking Words
bad
internet connection can be Correct article usage
a bad
cause
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a cause
to
deliberate information and Change preposition
for
attends
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attendance
to
the meeting. Change preposition
at
Further
, it is easy to Linking Words
someone
truthfulness with their body Change noun form
someone's
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but with the online Fix capitalization
language
conference
it is hard to read the Add a comma
conference,
people
minds. Change noun form
people's
Moreover
, less human interaction Linking Words
between
among colleagues because of teleconferencing.
In conclusion, teleconferencing has some advantages Change preposition
apply
like
time and cost Change preposition
apply
consuming
and it will Replace the word
consumption
be help
to Change the verb form
help
development
of the companies. Add an article
the development
Although
, it is easy to destroy information Linking Words
of
the company because of cyber attacks and Change preposition
about
bad
internet connection can Add an article
a bad
be disturb
the meeting are Change the verb form
disturb
main
demerits of remote gathering.Correct article usage
the main
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