These days, more and more business meetings are taking place online. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

Global
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village concept is getting more popular these days
due to
development of the technology.
Also
organizing business
meetings
via
zoom
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, skype, and team become a common thing because of technology improvement.
However
, virtual business
meetings
have merits
as well as
demerits.
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essay will elaborate
both
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good and bad.
Firstly
, organizing gatherings through technological apps can save money and time
of
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the
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people because if
,
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we need to physically be at one place for the gatherings, there will be travelling
cost
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and takes massive amount of time.
However
, thanks to computers and other automation there
is
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no
such
things.
Furthermore
, it is
good
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way to
cutdown
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the other expenses like venue
cost
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costs
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, resources like leaflets, handouts and food expenses.
Additionally
, anyone can attend
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the
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meetings
from
ant
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every
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corner of the world,
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become
easy
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an easy
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task because of virtual
meetings
.
Secondly
, there are some demerits of distance gatherings which
held
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through computers and other
electronical
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electronic
devices using
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the internet
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internet
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. Some of them are easy to hack and destroy or leak
the
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important information. Cyber attacks are
more
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a more
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popular and common thing these days.
Moreover
,
bad
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internet connection can be
cause
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to
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for
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deliberate information and
attends
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to
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at
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the meeting.
Further
, it is easy to
someone
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truthfulness with their body
Language
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but with the online
conference
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conference,
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it is hard to read the
people
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people's
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minds.
Moreover
, less human interaction
between
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among colleagues because of teleconferencing. In conclusion, teleconferencing has some advantages
like
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time and cost
consuming
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and it will
be help
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to
development
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the development
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of the companies.
Although
, it is easy to destroy information
of
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about
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the company because of cyber attacks and
bad
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a bad
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internet connection can
be disturb
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the meeting are
main
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the main
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demerits of remote gathering.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • cost-saving
  • time-saving
  • increased participation
  • flexibility
  • technical difficulties
  • lack of personal connection
  • distractions
  • limited interaction
  • language barriers
  • cultural differences
  • connectivity issues
  • audio/video problems
  • disrupt the flow
  • building rapport
  • non-verbal cues
  • reduced focus
  • spontaneous interaction
  • exchange of ideas
  • collaboration
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