the charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the bar charts give information about UK grad and postgraduate students who did not apply for full-time jobs after leaving in 2008. It is important to note that their first priority was
further
study and both groups Linking Words
instead
of working.
In both groups, admissions who applied for Linking Words
further
study were 29665 in the graduate group and 2725 in the postgraduate which was the highest number in comparison with part-time work or unemployment. Linking Words
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, in terms of part-time jobs there respectively 17735 and 2535 applications which for graduate students were just under 30000 and it was the second interesting opportunity for them to choose.
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On the other hand
, voluntary work had the lowest tendency among them was 3500 among graduate students and 345 for postgraduates. Linking Words
Furthermore
, the unemployment was high too, for graduates was 16235 and for postgraduates was 1625 in comparison with others the unemployment rate stood in the third stage.Linking Words
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