In some countries, many children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people say it is the responsibility of governments to solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In today’s globalizing world, overweight and

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have become increasingly popular among teenagers in recent years. A number of people hold different views about whether it is necessary for the

government

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to settle

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problem. From my personal perspective, I am convinced by

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viewpoint, and

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essay will shed light on the rationale. On the one hand, nowadays,

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are more likely to become overweight and unhealthy. It has several adverse effects on the society and average citizen’s health, so it is crucial for the

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to take responsibility for ensuring the well-being of citizens.

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to say, if a country is facing some serious problems

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as

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and

overweight

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, the

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must be the one to first address these threats, introduce and put some solutions

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practice.

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, the

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should impose higher taxes on fast food to reduce overweight issues in

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.

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the proportion of obese

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can be dramatically decreased by the commitment

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the policy.

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, the duty to combat

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in

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should not fall on the

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alone, because

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children’s

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families have

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influence on their

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unhealthy lifestyle. For one, an obese child is often malnourished simply by the lack of their parent’s attention to their child's diet.

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fact

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suggests that parents can have a direct impact on improving their

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children’s

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health by choosing healthy meals which contain less sugar and fat.

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that, the

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obese

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number of obese

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and unhealthy teenagers are

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caused by the lack of physical activities.

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can be exemplified by a sedentary lifestyle, the only ones who can tackle these problems are their parents, they can either encourage and guide their child to engage in more physical activity,

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as playing football, swimming, and doing yoga. A recent survey in VietNam indicated that

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children

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who are urged by their parents to engage in physical activities regularly have lesser potential to struggle with heart-related disease and

obesity

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. In conclusion, it is inevitable that the

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is still and will always be the main take responsibility for

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children’s

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health.

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, it seems that the

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alone may not be able to tackle these problems effectively and cooperation with

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children’s

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families is essential.