The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.

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The line chart

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depicts the number of people going out and coming

in to

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the

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over the span of twenty years,

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from 1979 to 1999. The candle graph illustrates how many native

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individuals in 1999 travelled to

diffrent

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different

nations. The values are expressed in millions.

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, the proportion of incoming and outgoing people rose steadily over the course of the timeline, where the latter was always higher than the former. Most of the

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residents visited France

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while

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going to Turkey counted for the least. In 1979, approximately 10 and 13

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people went inside and outside the

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, respectively.

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, the numerals continued to incline considerably over the next nineteen years,

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clocking up at more than 50

million

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individuals visiting other nations and a little close to 30

million

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tourists

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visiting

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. In 1999,

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approximately

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residents visited France,

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, around 9

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of them went to Spain. Somewhere around 4

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tourists fly to the USA and the least number of individuals globetrotted to Turkey counting about 2.5

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, million with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

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The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.

In some countries, only few young people go to classical music concerts or or play classical music. Why? Should young people be encouraged to attend and learn more

In the last century the first man to walk on the moon said it was a great step for mankind. But in fact space travel has made little difference to most people lives today. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who are choosing to educate their children themselves at home instead of sending them school. Do the advantages of home education outweigh the disadvantages?

In many countries today, both men and women need to work full time. Therefore, some people think men and women should share household takes equally (eg. cleaning and looking after children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Leaders and directors in an organization are normally older people. Some people think younger leader would be better. Do you agree or disagree?