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The maps below show the changes that have taken place at Forton Valley City from 2000 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the changes that have taken place at Forton Valley City from 2000 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps demonstrate apparent and slight changes
of
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in
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 Fortont
valley
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Valley
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 town between 2000 and 2010.
Overall
, the area has been modernized with abundant
cutting edge
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 facilities. In terms of radical changes, the western of
daisy
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Daisy
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Road
, farmland and dairy farms situated with each other were replaced. The former was brought down and made room for a playground, the latter was converted into
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a K.G
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K.G
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K.G.
 school with a minimal toy store in the northeast of it. Notably, Forton University was erected in the place where
K.G
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K.G.
 school used to be in 2000. To the east of Daisy
Road
, a city hall was designated
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 a public library and another parking lot was under construction in order to provide a wealth of parking spaces for citizens.
Furthermore
, an old park was substituted by Versity cafe which expanded to map edge. Regarding mild changes, a shopping center and T-
road
 which concluded Sheffield
road
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Road
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 and Daisy
road
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Road
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 underwent an unswerving constant.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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