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The first graph shows the number of train passengers from 2000 to 2009. The second graph shows the percentage of trains running on time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first graph shows the number of train passengers from 2000 to 2009. The second graph shows the percentage of trains running on time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts show how many passengers
traveled
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 by train between 2000 and 2009,
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 the punctuality rate of trains.
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, there was an upward fluctuation in the number of rail passengers during the given
period
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.
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, except for the
period
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 between 2004 and 2006, more trains ran punctually.
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 the punctuality target remained unchanged, it was either achieved or exceeded only from 2002 to 2005 and again during the
last
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 two years of the
period
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 in question. At the beginning of the
period
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, 40
billion
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 people
traveled
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 by train, after which it had risen steadily, reaching a peak of roughly 49
billion
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 by 2005, despite a slight drop in 2003. Between 2005 and 2008, a gradual decline of about 9
billion
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 passengers was witnessed, with a subsequent recovery to approximately 45
billion
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 in the final year. During the whole
period
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, the punctuality goal was consistently set at 95%. The percentage of trains being punctual, meanwhile, increased considerably from 92%
initially
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 to 96% 4 years later, followed by a substantial fall to the former level in 2005.
Thereafter
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, the figure soared to a high of 97% in 2008 before
leveling
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 off toward the end of the time frame.

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