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The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph provides the
number
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 of male and female
graduates
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 in Canada between 1992 and 2007.
Overall
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, it is evident that the
number
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 of female
graduates
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 was considerably higher than the
number
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 of male
graduates
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. It can
also
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 be seen that there was a gradual increase in the
number
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 of both men and women pursuing higher education.
To begin
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 with, there
was
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 nearly 100,000 female
graduates
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 in 1992.
This
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 total increased gradually until 1995 and
then
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 dropped slightly before picking up again in
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the year
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 2000. Afterwards, there was a rapid increase
for
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in
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 the
number
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 of female
graduates
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 and in
year
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 2006, their
number
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 was close to 150,000.
However
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, the same trend can be observed in the case of male
graduates
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. There were about 70,000 male
graduates
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 in 1992.
This
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number
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 increased gradually over the next three years, and in 1995, there were about 76,000 male
graduates
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. Afterwards, there was a gradual drop in the
number
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 of men pursuing graduation. Their numbers started increasing
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year
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 2002 and by 2006, there were close to 97,00

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, graduates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 4 times.
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